, get away from it for a few hours. Maybe even a couple of days. Then read through it one more time. Make little notes about where you want to make changes, but wait until you're done with that first read through before you change a single thing.
I worked as a mental health tech the year after I graduated high school. I had so many patients, it was hard to keep track of them all. However, I had one specific case that involved an African American boy that had early onset schizophrenia. His parents stopped his medicine cold turkey because they thought he was better. He reverted so far past his original symptomatology that his return was not looking good. I used this experience working with him as a way to address the lack of .
A better example of this same sentence is, "As a mental health tech, I witness the effects of a lack of resources or information about mental health and psychotropics. This is why it is important to me to get into a position where I can be a vessel of education about these topics. I want to put a familiar face in a community and help them understand the full scope of mental health".
Imagine if you were an admissions counselor reading hundreds or thousands of personal statements. The last thing you want to is to give them an essay that sounds like everyone else. Add some spunk and personality to it. Help them meet you before they you. If you sound interesting on paper, then they'll be dying to meet you in person. Tell personal anecdotes, carefully add a little humor, and invite them into your life.
Same message, two completely different forms of delivery. Don't get boxed into sounding like a cliche, but stay professional. Prove you know how to speak and write in an interesting, but business manner.How to get into the University of Pennsylvania's Perelman School of Medicine — one of the top 3 best medical programs in the US — according to studentsThis is not a cover letter where you can throw a bullet list right in the middle showing all your strengths.
Be specific. No one wants vague answers of "I want to be a surgeon because I had a really nice one that helped me deal with my injuries". What were the injuries? What specifically did the surgeon do or not do that made you choose to pursue this field? I specifically mentioned my patient instead of broadly talking about mental health. If you can be specific, then you add validity to your medical school personal statement.This is tricky but will give you good practice for interviews.